Wednesday, October 19, 2011

Artist's Eye

Hey everyone!  I am not an actual campaigner over at Rachael Harrie's Rach Writes blog but, I thought this would be a fun challenge anyway!  OK, here it is:

The bright sun shines down on the ripply water making it look like diamonds are just beneath the surface.  The orange/brown sand looks scorched from the burning, hot sun.  I see people sitting in hammocks enjoying the latest magazines, I see surfers, attempting to stay upright on their surfboards,  I can see the gulls crying out desperately for the food they can almost taste in their white throats, I can almost hear the sapphire waves crashing in a rhythmic pattern.  I can even almost see the palm trees swaying back and forth to the tacise breeze.  I look at the synbatec beach and smile.  It's breathtaking.  All of a sudden I start to smell something like wastopaneer.  I snap out of it and think... Fresh paint.  I stare at my work of art in front of me and sigh. 

Hope you liked it!  Here are the rules if you want to do this challenge as well:
 Write a blog post in 300 words or less, excluding the title. The post can be in any format, whether flash fiction, non-fiction, humorous blog musings, poem, etc. The blog post should show:

  • that it’s morning, 
  • that a man or a woman (or both) is at the beach
  • that the MC (main character) is bored
  • that something stinks behind where he/she is sitting
  • that something surprising happens.
Just for fun, see if you can involve all five senses AND include these random words: "synbatec," "wastopaneer," and "tacise."   (NB. these words are completely made up and are not intended to have any meaning other than the one you give them).

39 comments:

  1. That was both short and sweet! I'd love to take a look at this painting. Great job! :)

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  2. This is really good. Next time you should definitely take part in the Campaign :D

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  3. That is exactly what it feels like to paint. Wonderful job :)

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  4. That would be an awesome picture. I would buy it :)

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  5. Alyssa, your writing was very good. Great job.

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  6. Wow, this was clever! Love the "almost hear the sapphire waves crashing in a rhythmic pattern" ~ Good job! ; )

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  7. Nice job! I love that you made it a painting!

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  8. Great job Alyssa! Glad you participated. I see a lot of talent here. Great descriptions.

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  9. I did like it. You should join in next time. Mine is #56

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  10. Really good descriptive writing. Well done. Thanks for commenting on my blog :)

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  11. Nice one. :)
    There's a sense of longing that pulls you in.

    Thanks for dropping by at my blog!

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  12. Nice job! Wow, you are only 13!!! You are so on your way. Glad I got to stop by.

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  13. Excellent short piece. You get my vote.

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  14. Miranda- Thanks!! :D
    Bridgetstraub- Ok I'll go check it out! :)
    Claire- You're welcome!!
    natz- You're welcome!!
    Maeve- Thanks!! :D
    Doctor FTSE- Yay! Thank you! :D

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  15. Aloha Alyssa,

    Short and sweet, but I bet that painting would look great over a fireplace in Michigan or anywhere cold in the winter:)

    Well done you for having a blog at such an early age... Write well and I wish you the best of luck in the future!

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  16. Are you sure you're only 13? Nice job on your entry. Loved it! I'm #65, returning your visit:)

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  17. Thank you! And I am 13 haha :D

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  18. Lots of vivid description in such a short piece. Great job!

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  19. Nicely done! I liked the way you used the words, as though they were regular everyday words!

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  20. Great imagery, and I loved how you used the challenge words.
    Mine is #25.

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  21. Thanks! OK, I'll go check it out! :)

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  22. Great story! Loved the painting twist :)

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  23. Great job Alyssa, maybe you should take up writing also with all the rest of your accomplishments. Happy Belated Birthday. Sounds like you move around a lot. Hope you will be happy in Seattle. Sounds like you will make friends easily. Hope you have a great trip.

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  24. Thanks everyone!
    caspersmom- Thanks for the birthday wish! :D

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  25. A wonderful piece, and you captured what it's like to paint. :)

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  26. Very nice. You're in the second round of voting, you know, so here's good luck to you.

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